Raven_Writer
14-12-2004, 17:46
I wrote a love poem to my girlfriend, and was wondering if I could get some feedback on what you think of it, what could be changed, etc...
** The Japanese version is actually a mix of Japanese and English mixed **
K (Japanese) (http://www.poetrybox.com/detail.asp?PoemNum=18601)
K (English) (http://www.poetrybox.com/detail.asp?PoemNum=18602)
<< I'm gonna add a thanks here to PoetryBox.com for being a great poetry community, and hosting these poems. Also, if someone finds a mistake in the the wording (aka: kanji not meaning feeling), please let me know on that too. >>
Thanks
** The Japanese version is actually a mix of Japanese and English mixed **
K (Japanese) (http://www.poetrybox.com/detail.asp?PoemNum=18601)
K (English) (http://www.poetrybox.com/detail.asp?PoemNum=18602)
<< I'm gonna add a thanks here to PoetryBox.com for being a great poetry community, and hosting these poems. Also, if someone finds a mistake in the the wording (aka: kanji not meaning feeling), please let me know on that too. >>
Thanks