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I tend to nitpick a lot. You can feel free to ignore most everything I pointed out. Changes are in red.
(I also have a bad habit of abusing the comma. Watch out for that.)
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--Madison--
...down at the Ozdust!
Like a grand and miraculous spaceship, our planet has sailed through the universe of time. And for a brief moment, we have been among its many passengers.
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