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Re: Critique of a Poster and Brochure

David, some of this is a critique of your critique...

3D design and systems design are not the same by any means. In this case, I would actually go with 3D design. If system design is included, it should be added to the existing list.

"We use education" to "we apply knowledge..." I would actually just change "use" to "apply". Education covers knowledge gained in school... but school isn't the only place you get an education.

On the "future" statements, I think they're fine as is. If anything, combine them into one big "we are future..." statement. You are not an engineer until you know your engineering topics (typically college-level). (There was also some discussion some time back on CD about this.) Leave the "future" in there.

The common set of parts is a big part of the design process. Imagine designing where you could use any motor you wanted... Keep that in there.

The strategy line needs some rework. I'm not certain there is a good way to put it, other than: "We strategize to find the best way to win the event." [Please note: match and event strategy may differ. There are teams who have lost matches to have a better shot at the event.]

Scholarships: Are the scholarships provided to FIRST (the organization) or to FIRST participants? Might want to think about that one...

Definitely some apostrophe work needing doing in the poster, as David showed. (Students should also learn the difference between a plural, a possessive, and a plural possessive... and apply that difference to the first one.) Also, poster center column, you may want to put the last bullet point into present tense. Imperative voice may also work well for all the points.
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