[Tom Ore]

I took a quick look at it. I didn't read it in detail, but just skimmed over it to see the highlights. The first thing that strikes me is that there aren't many hightlights. Much of the text runs together without bold text to introduce new topics. My thinking is that you may be better off to break up the text some with headings so the sponsors can skim over it and stop to read the details of sections that catch their interest.