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Do you want feedback on the site itself or the poetry? The actual site is fine I guess. Very black.

In Nothing Will Matter, Mr. Game, I Like You and War Time Novelty, taking lines directly from Metallica songs is not cool. Be inspired by them or use one line as a base, but write a poem with your own words instead of stealing lines. At least give credit or something. Funny that you have that copyright message at the bottom.

As for poetry in general, you might want to try writing more poems that don't rhyme, or try to have longer lines. There are some really simple short rhymes in there and a LOT of lines that sound like you just put filler in so it would rhyme. Ouch.