[Raven_Writer]

Please tell me what you think about this song I wrote (any criticism accepted, I love it):

Battle Cry
Barking dogs chase after me day and night
Falling angels always seem to wanna target me
Running from my dreams that I once had
Harder and harder, I pant til I faint
Falling down, being tear up by the dogs
Bleeding now, I'm being killed by the angels

The pain I've enjoyed
The joy I've endured
Never before did I think of this
Now I'm giving my last prayer
Just before I meet the grim reaper
And now I leave my fate here forever

Flying devils dance infront of me
Holes fill the life I've lived
Just to see another day full of hell
Love has left my heart
Pain has filled my fingers
As I pull the trigger, and relieve some anger
The time burns faster
And I die from this caster

The pain I've enjoyed
The joy I've endured
Never before did I think of this
Now I'm giving my last prayer
Just before I meet the grim reaper
And now I leave my fate here forever

No more will I love my goddess
No more will I love my life

(repeat botton 2 lines 2x w/ a fade)
Ash to ash, dust to dust
Lay my heart forever in lust