FIRST inspired poetry... that I wrote for my English Literature class in college

[Elgin Clock]

First of all, I would like to thank everyone who responded to my call for FIRST inspired terms in THIS THREAD.

I handed these in for extra credit on the last day of class, so I won't recieve any feedback about them, so I ask you for the feedback instead.

Basically the assignment was to write a form poem (sestina, sonnet, or villanelle) & an open form poem. The open form poem I'll have to upload later, since I did it so that the shape of the words in the poem spelled out FIRST

Anyways, here's my form poem, and I chose to do a villanelle style poem.


6 Weeks of Hell

FIRST, you need to learn how to play the game
How to win it and what to design.
Now we have an idea, let’s make the frame.
Make some parts from CAD drawings like mine.
Build a chassis and make it roll.
Add the gearboxes, and add the chain
Wire it up and drill a speed hole.
Is it complete? When can we train?
It’s almost done let’s build the field
Look at that, the bot’s not gonna flip.
Go driver go, don’t go and yield.
Hurry up and practice, WE GOTTA SHIP!!
Pack the crate early and we’ll finish by noon.
Hope that it’s done, we’ll compete with it soon.


A villenelle style poem follows a pattern assigned with the last rhyming words of each line. If you were to list the rhyming sound by line, by assigning letters to them it would look like:

A,B,A,B,
C,D,C,D,
E,F,E,F,
GG

Where as the 1st line's last word rhymes with the 3rd, the 2nd with the 4th. and so on.. until the end where the last two words in the last two lines rhyme with each other.

OK, now that I am done giving you a study of poetry, what do you all think??

[Katie Reynolds]

*gives her best post-poetry reading polite clap*

Way cool!! I like it.

[Venkatesh]

Wow. You called it hell too? At the start of each season, I would always say, "Let the gates of hell open." Do any others use that metaphor as well?

[Stephen Kowski]

way groovy man....*snaps fingers* (beatnick style)

[Dorienne]

I really like that! I can't write poems like that, excellent job! That stuff is kinda hard isn't it? Trying to rhyme every other line, then start over? Yikes!
But hey, great going, Elgin! ^__^; Kudos to you.
--d0ri

[Franchesca]

Originally Posted by Elgin Clock

6 Weeks of Hell

FIRST, you need to learn how to play the game
How to win it and what to design.
Now we have an idea, let’s make the frame.
Make some parts from CAD drawings like mine.
Build a chassis and make it roll.
Add the gearboxes, and add the chain
Wire it up and drill a speed hole.
Is it complete? When can we train?
It’s almost done let’s build the field
Look at that, the bot’s not gonna flip.
Go driver go, don’t go and yield.
Hurry up and practice, WE GOTTA SHIP!!
Pack the crate early and we’ll finish by noon.
Hope that it’s done, we’ll compete with it soon.


A villenelle style poem follows a pattern assigned with the last rhyming words of each line. If you were to list the rhyming sound by line, by assigning letters to them it would look like:

A,B,A,B,
C,D,C,D,
E,F,E,F,
GG

Where as the 1st line's last word rhymes with the 3rd, the 2nd with the 4th. and so on.. until the end where the last two words in the last two lines rhyme with each other.

OK, now that I am done giving you a study of poetry, what do you all think??

OOOh Great!! ... poetry (something I'm good at)! Although I'm much more of a free form poetist ...I've written several villenelle style poems in my time! Now this may sound a little weird but when I write this type of poem I start with my first intial rhyming lines for example:
FIRST, you need to learn how to play the game
&
Now we have an idea, let’s make the frame.

and then I fill the lines in between ... of course to do that you must have the general idea of what your poem is about and well .. maybe its just me!!!

Overall, the poem is good ... definetly covers the whole 6 weeks of the building system. What I am worried about is how you'll get graded on it ... but that depends on the teacher!
Good luck with that ... and I give you a full ten *snap* count for it ... very well done!!!

[tiffany34990]

:clapping:

nice poem-- i would write a poem about robotics too if my teachers made me--lol--so addicted to FIRST--lol--

great job!!! keep up the good work in school!

[Leslie]

hmm...i thought it was pretty cheesy, really, but whatever

[Elgin Clock]

Originally Posted by Leslie

hmm...i thought it was pretty cheesy, really, but whatever

Well majority rules... so Thanks to everyone who enjoyed it.

For those of you who didn't...
Meh... To each their own..

[Franchesca]

Originally Posted by Elgin Clock

Well majority rules... so Thanks to everyone who enjoyed it.

For those of you who didn't...
Meh... To each their own..

I ABSOLUTELY agree!!! Poetry is a very sensitive subject ... completely judged by the listener based solely on their own likes!!! Its not something that people can be MADE TO LIKE!

Anyway, I liked it and I'm 100% behind it !

P.S. What happened to your other icon, Elgin? I think I liked the other one better ... errr but if you are happy with this one ... then so be it!

good job with the poem! Im never well at writing poems and songs and stuff liek that, but its good to me.