FIRST Stronghold Game Explanation.

[GeeTwo]

IMO, Rev1 is better than rev2.
Breach and capture are not defined, or even hinted as to what they are. Perhaps I'm looking at things differently approaching bedtime than I was in the afternoon, but the omissions this afternoon seemed necessary to get down to a two page document, but the omissions in the current version seem likely to give family and friends the wrong impression as to the rules.

What I definitely do like about both is the highly graphical nature. Keep the periodic table. Keep the field layout. The damage lights to the defenses and tower can perhaps be reduced (e,g, cropping out certain states or just focussing on one defense), but not eliminated. Try not to increase the word count more than a few percent, and then only if you're giving more information necessary for a casual observer.